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Rave
The observer; always there, never a part


Joined: 20 May 2007
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 04, 2007 12:40 pm    Post subject:  Reply with quote

Angel Amaya wrote:
@ Rave: When do you want me to start? ^_^ It's going to be an Arella oneshot, kinda dark...

@ Jazion: Give me a break Jaz-chan... V_V It took 3 months to finish this (Plot bunnies keep multiplying like the bunnies they are, then they get lazy and die... *Pokes almost dead plot bunny*)... You might like the sequel better... We all see a side of Arella we thought she never had... ^^


Start.. NOW!!!! XD
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Jazion Keera
The Shadow Queen


Joined: 23 Apr 2007
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Location: In the shadows, always watching

PostPosted: Wed Nov 07, 2007 12:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Gotcha... For the uninitiated, the shadow war stories blog is at http://shadowwarstories.blogspot.com/
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XShen
An Ordinary Servant Neko


Joined: 09 Feb 2007
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Location: Home

PostPosted: Sun Nov 11, 2007 3:33 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very Nice... And a cliffy too...
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Kakashi
The Wise skateboarder


Joined: 09 Jul 2007
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Location: Florida

PostPosted: Sun Nov 11, 2007 3:34 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

15.9 out of 10.0 I liked the very beggining, it was intresting..
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Neyo Green



Joined: 01 Jul 2007
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PostPosted: Thu Jan 31, 2008 11:57 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ok... You asked for a review, so I will deliver, be it somewhat reluctantly  Confused

Ok... I'll get the flaws out of the way first, since there weren't many at all. It was a bit had to understand at points, probably because I'm not familiar with the characters. I noticed misuse of words once or twice too. Not really all that important, but still, I'm picky about those sorts of things.

The good parts... Kept me interested, made me want to keep reading. Even though I didn't know who they were or what was really going on, it was captivating. For someone your age, I have to say, you can write DAMN WELL. Keep it up, literacy is a lost art. Also, for someone like me who didn't know the characters, the inclusion of the lyrics to What Hurts the Most helped me understand it better, helped it to flow better.

Good work  Cool xox, Rob
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Jazion Keera
The Shadow Queen


Joined: 23 Apr 2007
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Location: In the shadows, always watching

PostPosted: Sun Aug 03, 2008 2:47 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

*grins and taps desk* I do believe there was a sequel in the making?
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Angel Amaya
Angelic Warrior Princess


Joined: 30 Jun 2007
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Location: In the heavens above, watching over you...

PostPosted: Mon Aug 04, 2008 2:06 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

*Immediatly hides* Nao... Nao... My muse for that was mysteriously murdered after a blonde dragon's jealousy fit 7 months ago...
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Briman
The vanished.. now returned.


Joined: 11 Nov 2006
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Location: At my computer :O

PostPosted: Mon Aug 04, 2008 9:04 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I cant believe i didn't read this sooner! I LOVED IT!!

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